Good stuff here
The best word I can use to describe this is potential. I will give you my input form the beginning and try and make this review as helpful to you as possible. You intro was good but I think you could have come in a bit stronger with the bass at 7 sec you had a good sound but if was put a bit too far in the background. Kinda same thing happened with the piano which made it hard to hear. All the note theory and arrangments were good just the builds seemed kinda small so maybe if you had a bit longer snare rolls picking up in the filter cut might help add some more omph to it like at 1:20. The crash you had did work but just in personal taste I like to make them have a clean reeverberation a bit. Your ending was well balanced and organized. So to generalize what I said don't let your sounds drown out in the beginning, add more emphasis to your builds and keep a good balance like you had at the ending throughout the song. Other than that I see nothing wrong with this song my hats off to you on this one congrads.